Essay #2 Peer Review

I thought that every ones comments were helpful, especially Adam Paytons, and Michael Blose. Thanks guys! Some good points were made on how to improve my paper like to make my paper a more persuasive paper instead of informative one. There were also ideas on how to make my paragraphs flow better. I'm glad that everyone thought the topic was interesting. I will use all the tips that were recommend to me. I will also reformat my indention's in my paper, and correct fragment sentences.